The best part about this one is that it feels like you accidentally wrote the first chapter of a novel. By the end I had more questions than answers, and somehow that made it creepier. Also, “Finished was not the same as complete. One was done; one was whole.” is an incredible line.
Thank you so much! I may, in fact extend in into a larger piece as I was setting up a whole slew of things for possible roads that I realized I coudln’t travel in a flash fiction piece.
Thanks, Mac! Yeah…I wanted to leave the eyes a mystery. At least for now. If I extend the story into a larger piece, then I’ll likely reveal who/what the eyes are…and all the other elements I intentionally left unexplained in this short tale.
The best part about this one is that it feels like you accidentally wrote the first chapter of a novel. By the end I had more questions than answers, and somehow that made it creepier. Also, “Finished was not the same as complete. One was done; one was whole.” is an incredible line.
Thank you so much! I may, in fact extend in into a larger piece as I was setting up a whole slew of things for possible roads that I realized I coudln’t travel in a flash fiction piece.
So glad you enjoyed it!
I can’t wait to read it!
And there's ambiguity, but you leave just enough space that it might not have been only Killian.
The haiku writing scene is a nice play with form (I APPROVE!)
Well done
Thanks, Mac! Yeah…I wanted to leave the eyes a mystery. At least for now. If I extend the story into a larger piece, then I’ll likely reveal who/what the eyes are…and all the other elements I intentionally left unexplained in this short tale.